Video Tutorial and Written Feedback 7
In this video tutorial, we reviewed again the Critical Review draft. This draft is the result of the video session I had with Ariadne Xenou and her advice.
We started right from Ariadne's considerations, which can be summarized as follows:
• This critical review is unconventional and therefore interesting, because it starts from a literary text and then focuses on a photographic discipline.
• For this reason, it is important to explain well, in the introduction, the purpose and the path that lead from one discipline to another and the reason for the selection of the case studies.
• It is not necessary to include in the critical review all the material that I have collected during my research (for example on the virtual flaneur): this material can be included in the learning log as part of the research that has informed my practice and my photographic experiments.
• Do not structure the critical review in separate paragraphs, but instead argue, and therefore favor, the conceptual and logical passage between one topic and another, starting from the origins of the flaneur and arriving at the interpretations of more modern authors and other disciplines.
• Don't get conditioned by respecting the word count while writing and carry out this process at the end of the critical review.
Action points
• The concluding part does not make justice to the work and needs to be completed and refined better, making it coherent with the introduction.
• Susan Sonntag's sentence can be repositioned and used better to link Rebecca Solnit's text with the relationship between flaneur and photography.
• Develop further the part concerning the political appropriation by situationism of the figure, up to that point artistic, of the flaneur and the opposition between political situationists and artist situationists on which path to take on these topics.
• Restructure the word count of the text, assigning 250 words to the introduction, 250 to the conclusion and divide the rest (2000 words) among the various case studies, depending on how many there are, assigning, for example, 500 words to each, and compressing each text, without indulging in preambles.
• "Making work" the images as elements of structure and reference of the text content.
• Consider citing the various examples in chronological order to tie the flow of reasoning to the flow of time.
• Stress more the concept of the flaneur as a byproduct of urbanization and reorganization of society, as a transgressive figure who goes beyond pre-established boundaries, embodying the main objective of psychogeographic reasoning.